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Deeper than Breathing

curiouswombat - 13 Feb 09 - 2:31 PM

Ch. 8: Chapter 8:Gandalf.

That chapter has left me quite breathless. 

From the opening attempts by Legolas to break the pre-battle tension going into such real and frightening battle scenes was an excellent contrast.   

I am always admiring of anyone who can write good battle scenes, and yours is very well written - I could feel, hear and taste it.  I thought the sudden jolt, the reminder that Legolas is a Mirkwood elf in the midst of a mens' battle but his own people are in the same war, was perfectly placed as well.

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