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Blind

IVIaedhros - 15 Jun 07 - 12:04 PM

Ch. 1: Blind

Very good idea, I think.  However, I think your last line should be taken out.  Leave it entirely up to the reader to imagine what the ghosts (or are they merely his own insanity?) plaguing Maglor appear to be.  Instead, insert more physical descriptions like what he felt when the hand grabbed his hair.  This indirectly describes the brothers without giving them away.  

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Blind

MithLuin - 22 Oct 07 - 8:25 PM

Ch. 1: Blind

*shiver*  Aye, the Curse.  They would fear the Everlasting Darkness, wouldn't they?  And so avoid Námo's Halls.  Well done!  Though why do they resent him so? 

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