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Blind

Rhapsody - 01 Jul 07 - 3:51 PM

General Comment

This is just so hauntng and painful to see Maglor in such a state: going from near excitement of seeing his brothers again and yet being reminded once more how cruel his fate actually is. I think this especially came out with a great pacing and with a fine balance in showing the reader what Maglor can perceive. This is a great work!

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Tyleet - 13 Feb 08 - 7:03 PM

General Comment

Oh. Oh, Maglor. Blind and unaware of his madness, because it doesn't ever occur to him that his brothers are dead, and therefore cannot be with him...his brothers that are trying to kill him. Except the Valar won't allow it...oh, that's terrible. And terribly well written. This one's going to stay with me!

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IVIaedhros - 15 Jun 07 - 12:04 PM

Ch. 1: Blind

Very good idea, I think.  However, I think your last line should be taken out.  Leave it entirely up to the reader to imagine what the ghosts (or are they merely his own insanity?) plaguing Maglor appear to be.  Instead, insert more physical descriptions like what he felt when the hand grabbed his hair.  This indirectly describes the brothers without giving them away.  

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MithLuin - 22 Oct 07 - 8:25 PM

Ch. 1: Blind

*shiver*  Aye, the Curse.  They would fear the Everlasting Darkness, wouldn't they?  And so avoid Námo's Halls.  Well done!  Though why do they resent him so? 

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Marta - 01 Jul 07 - 9:09 AM

Ch. 2: Author's Note

This was really sad, but also really well done. I don't think I've ever read a story that so effectively crawled inside how terrorizing the Oath would be to Feanor's sons, even after death.

 Though  the Quenya names did throw me for a loop. Maglor lived for centuries in Middle-earth, presumably he must have learned Quenya, and it did make it harder for me as a reader familiar with the Silmarillion but not an afficionado of Silmfic to follow along. Still, once I got past that it really was a fine story, and you should be proud. 

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