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Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

Adaneth - 09 Apr 07 - 9:40 AM

Ch. 1: Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

We dug and we sweated and we broke our backs upon the anvils of our pride, and every blow was glorious.

Oh, yes.

Is this roughly carved in a passage, somewhere?  The runes written on fine marble in blood?

Glad to see someone else who writes about Dwarves!

Cheers--

Adaneth

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Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

Dwimordene - 09 Apr 07 - 11:50 AM

Ch. 1: Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

The quote that Adaneth put in her comment caught my attention. I like this very much - the ecstatic working of the dwarves, drawn by the future ("traffickers in dreams") and propelled by a vision of the past ("on the verge of shaming our families, our ancestors, we told ourselves"), they ignore the very wisdom of the ancestors who sealed the breach and the dearth of future attested by the sheer blankness of the monolith.

What's left for dwarven ghosts to do, save haunt the halls, silent warning to travellers, if the travellers could hear them, of the danger loosed by pride.

Well done!

Dwim 

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Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

Larner - 27 Dec 07 - 10:50 AM

Ch. 1: Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

Oh, what fantastic imagery!  If only they had realized that obdurate wall was NOT natural and was intended to seal away what must not be released once more!

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Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

Raksha The Demon - 15 Jan 10 - 6:42 AM

Ch. 1: Seen In The Halls Of Dwarrowdelf

A  very powerful story, Aruthir - I love the echoes of Shelley's Ozymandias in the first paragraph; and the sense of frenzied ambition, the justifiable pride of the dwarves in their craft rising in greed, and the sad, terrible end.  Nicely done!

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