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Sometime Ever After

Imhiriel - 08 Apr 07 - 11:50 AM

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This story is told so very grippingly - is that a word? no matter... Wink What I mean is: You manage to write from so far within Aragorn's perspective that the readers feel as if they are very directly witnessing his feelings and thoughts, as if they are sitting in his head, almost.

The way the episodes weave in and out of focus also help to convey Aragorn's current condition with its hallucinations. These episodes seem to be not completely "there", just a little out of focus. And this is so effectively contrasted with the change in writing style in last paragraphs, with its so much more neutral, observant and reporting voice.

And on top of that, the relationship you convey between Aragorn and Halbarad is as fully-realised as ever when you write about them. Just a few brushstrokes, a few well-chosen words in dialogue and description...

Really, really well done, Dwim!

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Sometime Ever After

Dwimordene - 09 Apr 07 - 11:58 AM

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Thank you for your comments, Imhiriel!

You manage to write from so far within Aragorn's perspective that the readers feel as if they are very directly witnessing his feelings and thoughts, as if they are sitting in his head, almost.

Good, I'm glad. There should be a sense in which the reader sees things through Aragorn's eyes, if in two different modes.

And on top of that, the relationship you convey between Aragorn and Halbarad is as fully-realised as ever when you write about them. Just a few brushstrokes, a few well-chosen words in dialogue and description...

Thank you! I love the challenge that theypresent as a pair: decades of friendship, clearly very close, but for that reason, with very little need to talk things out a lot. It makes for an interesting play of speech and silence.

TTFN,

Dwim

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