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Full of Wisdom and Perfect in Beauty

Aganaphel - 08 May 07 - 9:27 AM

Ch. 10: Andúnië

It is a wonderful chapter, Maeve, not too long at all and easy to read, full of interesting new details like the story of Melkorbazer, for instance, and that of Lindorie his wife.  Also a breath-taking description of the castle of Andunie – I bet you have based it on some Mediterranean or a Spanish/Portuguese Atlantic coast fortress. And I loved the description of Mallorns – somehow people tend to forget that there were mallorns in Numenor even bigger than those of Lorien.  No wonder Inziladun was quite dazed being told all the Silm in one sitting! But he seems a strong one, indeed. Now when you have told the readers enough to understand your AU numenor, it has become easier to follow the story.  One single nitpick: "Your father was Melkorbazer, kin to the King in Ar-Zimrathôn´s time." Eärendur continued." I think you meant "your grandfather"? 

Wondrous job, Maeve. Please update!

 

Aganaphel

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Full of Wisdom and Perfect in Beauty

Maeve Riannon - 09 May 07 - 11:10 AM

Ch. 10: Andúnië

It is a wonderful chapter, Maeve, not too long at all and easy to read, full of interesting new details like the story of Melkorbazer, for instance, and that of Lindorie his wife

Heh. These are some of the characters I really regret not being able to develop further, but everyone is getting the short end of the stick because of lack of space. Pity.

Also a breath-taking description of the castle of Andunie – I bet you have based it on some Mediterranean or a Spanish/Portuguese Atlantic coast fortress.

Er -actually, this part has no influences I can think of. I was mainly thinking of something that would slightly prefigure Gondor, which is so different from late Númenor.

Now when you have told the readers enough to understand your AU numenor, it has become easier to follow the story.

Oh, I do not like to think of it as AU. I prefer to fancy I am following canon, but Tolkien´s version is a chronicle and mine is the- let´s say development, of what truly happened behind those lines. If I find an affirmation to be humanly impossible, then I alter it (like the lack of religion).

Did it sound believable? *ducks*

One single nitpick: "Your father was Melkorbazer, kin to the King in Ar-Zimrathôn´s time." Eärendur continued." I think you meant "your grandfather"?

I think I meant "Her father" -but sometimes Númenorean inbreeding becomes too much for me. Sick

Thank you very much for all!

Maeve

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