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Answers and Questions

Jay of Lasgalen - 29 Nov 06 - 2:17 PM

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I loved this when I first read it, and if I could, I'd have approved it for the archive - but as a Review Admin I'm not allowed!

I particularly enjoy stores with Elladan and Elrohir with their 'little brother' - but I must admit I wanted to thump Elladan in this one.  I understood Elrohir's explanation, but still ...

Jay

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thorongirl - 29 Nov 06 - 4:13 PM

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Ah, I recognized the makings of a great author immediately and you've more than satisfied my desire for a well written story involving Estel and his elven brothers. I expect we'll be 'seeing' a lot more of your wonderful stories. Congratulations.

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peredhil lover - 29 Nov 06 - 4:39 PM

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Thanks, Jay, as a relaively new writer, I certainly appreciate the feedback.  I'm so pleased that you're enjoying my stories, as I've always enjoyed your portrayal of the twins.

As for Elladan's behaviour, I wanted to try something a little different while still hopefully keeping him consistent and believable and maintaining a respect for Tolkien's canon.  The twins have always been my first love and I have given a lot of thought to them and the factors that have influenced their actions and reactions.

If you're still reading my other story "Day and Night" you may see Elladan begin to warm up to Estel, at least a little.

Thanks again!

peredhil lover 

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peredhil lover - 29 Nov 06 - 4:51 PM

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Thanks, viggomaniac!  You've always been very supportive of my writing. I really appreciate it.

peredhil lover 

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Raihon - 29 Nov 06 - 8:51 PM

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I don't have a clue about the twins, but this story sucked me in immediately because of the clear, evocative writing. I especially enjoyed Estel's reaction to emerging from the battle trance and the glimpses of the weight of experience on Elrohir.

Two picky things that jumped out at me: would these Orcs be the "spawn of Mordor," or some other brand of spawn?; and "ride with Elladan and I" should be "with Elladan and me."

One less picky thing: I think the "he is so critical of you because" paragraph is redundant of what is already said or implied and slows the pacing of the story a bit.

Cheers!

-Raihon 

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