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No Man's Child

Gandalfs apprentice - 26 Oct 06 - 7:25 AM

Ch. 38: Chapter 37

What beautiful writing, what a beautiful scene! Sorry to be so coarse after your eloquence, but this PAF is happy. And of course I am wondering, wondering...what about Arwen?

Something wrong here:

The reeds squeak as they rub one tother but soon my lord has lifted them from me.

We shall see once our son has visited the wrath of ever heir of Elendil, from Isildur to your father, upon you.

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No Man's Child

Anoriath - 26 Oct 06 - 4:36 PM

Ch. 38: Chapter 37

Thanks GA! I'm glad you liked it.

I'll take a look at the spots you highlighted. Maybe some rephrasing or comma-moving.

this PAF is happy.

*blink* PAF. PAF? Hmmm, must be a blogging term I don't know. *googles*

"Pakistan Air Force" Uh.. no.

"Paroxysmal atrial fibrillation?" Most likely not.

And my personal favorite: "Punk A?? Fraggers" *snork* Probably not, but shall leave it as an option.

No! No! Wait! I think I've got it. It doesn't mean "Perverted Aragorn Fan" does it? Laugh out loud

Thanks again!

~Silli

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