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No Man's Child

Gandalfs apprentice - 17 Oct 06 - 8:35 AM

Ch. 34: Chapter 33

A delightful chapter, with a sad foreshadowing at the end. I love seeing Aragorn with his son.

Toward the beginning, "proceed" should be precede?

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Anoriath - 17 Oct 06 - 8:03 PM

Ch. 34: Chapter 33

A delightful chapter, with a sad foreshadowing at the end. I love seeing Aragorn with his son.

Yes!  Aragorn was so stern and yet loving and solicitous of the young hobbits I can only imagine that he would have made a very good father, once he figured it out.  :)

Toward the beginning, "proceed" should be precede?

Ah, and yes it should be "precede."  Thanks for catching that.

Thanks again, GA.

~Silli 

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IVIaedhros - 18 Oct 06 - 7:24 AM

Ch. 34: Chapter 33

As always, very impressive.  Your ability to create realistic domestic scenes and visualize what Aragorn's life might have been like without the Evenstar as his love is awesome.  If I have a complaint, it's that you spend almost too much time sketching out the everyday.  A little tension and crisis thrown in a different points would help IMO...and I'm not necessarily talking about their house being attacked by the wraiths either, say Nienelen gives Aragorn a scare by becoming extremely sick and he is forced to examine his feelings for her.   

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Anoriath - 19 Oct 06 - 4:56 PM

Ch. 34: Chapter 33

As always, very impressive.  Your ability to create realistic domestic scenes and visualize what Aragorn's life might have been like without the Evenstar as his love is awesome.

Thanks  IVIaedhros.  Smile  (btw: That's certainly a creative way to get around the name already being taken.)

If I have a complaint, it's that you spend almost too much time sketching out the everyday.  A little tension and crisis thrown in a different points would help IMO...and I'm not necessarily talking about their house being attacked by the wraiths either, say Nienelen gives Aragorn a scare by becoming extremely sick and he is forced to examine his feelings for her.  

Ah, yes, it's always a challenge to keep up the tension but not let it bleed power from your climax.  Thanks for your feedback.  I'll definitely keep it in mind. 

~Silli 

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