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No Man's Child

Gandalfs apprentice - 03 Oct 06 - 9:25 AM

Ch. 28: Chapter 27

For the first half I was thinking that all the details dragged, but you ended the chapter with such punch that I eschew all criticism.

Well, he doesn't love her, but he treats her very well. Still, so sad, for both of them. And Arwen too. At least one heart is to be broken here. I really can't see you working out a "happy" ending in that way, although there must be a resolution of sorts. 

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No Man's Child

Anoriath - 03 Oct 06 - 4:21 PM

Ch. 28: Chapter 27

For the first half I was thinking that all the details dragged

Hmmm... I'll have to take a look at it, then. Thanks for the feedback! Sometimes I become too enamored with the idea of something (like the politics of a hallmoot) and indulge myself just a little too much.

I've got enough focus on individuals to give it life and energy, I think.  But, to balance it out, I'm sure some of the details could be wittled down to tighten the chapter up a bit. Just because meetings of that nature probably had their share of tedium doesn't necessarily mean I need to induce it in the reader. ;D

you ended the chapter with such punch

Thanks, GA!

I wasn't so sure how that idea would be received. I'm introducing something from the real world that Tolkien didn't mention as being a part of Me culture.  But, neither did he state it wasn't and I wanted to create some uncertainty. Adding that idea helps increase the range of possible endings and I'm hoping to keep the reader guessing as long as I can.

Well, he doesn't love her, but he treats her very well.

Yeaaaah. A truly honorable man. *wibble*

Thanks again!

~Silli

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