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Another Man's Cage

oshun - 23 Nov 06 - 5:47 PM

Ch. 18: Chapter Eighteen--Macalaure

The insights into adolescent first love are completely on point. The scene between Macalaurë and his father is stunning. One of the many in which you set up how it is the undeniable intensity of the love of Fëanor for his sons that makes their oath possible and the rejection of it impossible. As usual, I am captivated by the humor throughout the chapter and, as always, love your subtle inserts of details on the relationship between Nerdanel and Fëanor. Favorite quote: "I have seen him pick fights with grandfather Finwë and with Amil, and always, he opens with dangerous rhetorical stabs such as this. Do I disappoint you that much as a son? Is marriage with me so completely unbearable?" 

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Iel_o_Thorongil - 23 Nov 06 - 9:46 PM

Ch. 18: Chapter Eighteen--Macalaure

Beautiful.

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Dinromeniel - 24 Nov 06 - 5:37 AM

Ch. 18: Chapter Eighteen--Macalaure

Oh my. The sheer talent behind this entire story takes my breath away. I have never read anything that depicts the Feanorians or daily life in Valinor as real and as clear and as complex and as RIGHT as this story you are writing.

 "You tell me that the sound of water inspires you, so I build you a fountain. You receive an invitation to an audition and the desire in your eyes takes my breath, so I send you to Alqualondë. I was given a baby son with a voice greater than that of the Valar, so I put a harp in his hands. Do you think I am not proud of you, Macalaurë?" 

This last scene just stabbed at my heart, and almost made me cry (which is unheard of). Never before have I been moved to feel real empathy or even pity (although that is not the right word…this is why I am a reader and not a writer J ) for Feanor. Just beautiful. 

-Dinromeniel

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Rhapsody - 18 Dec 06 - 7:10 AM

Ch. 18: Chapter Eighteen--Macalaure

Dawn, this was a chapter in which I wanted to savour every bit, read it again, let it simmer and go back to it again. It leaves me wondering with so many things, it makes me cry and smile. This is a chapter with such a wide range of emotions, but yet it does not feel forced and full circle. You know I am the most bouncy when a new Tyelko chapter goes up, but this chapter is such a gem.

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