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Fever Dreams

JunoMagic - 20 Nov 05 - 12:02 PM

Ch. 1: Fever Dreams

Hi Gwynnyd,

I feel so bad about not commenting more.

I really love this story. The atmosphere you convey is *great*, right on spot.

My only nitpick is right at the beginning:

The flowers of the white tree send a perfume through the lofty white towers of the citadel that cannot quite be grasped as other than joy.

I don't think you need "white" the second time. To avoid repetition I'd simply leave that off.

What I loved most is that Faramir does not immediately remember Aragorn and "fanboy" him.

Cheers,
Juno

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Fever Dreams

Ti'ana Luthien - 16 Feb 06 - 12:09 PM

Ch. 1: Fever Dreams

Oh...Gwynnyd, this is wonderful. The imagery, the atmosphere, the characterization...thank you for bringing it all to life for me.

Cheers,

Ti :)

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